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Post by Admin on Nov 8, 2012 13:10:28 GMT -6
Stuck on a scene or character development? Wonder if a certain idea you have will be well-received? Have writer's block?
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ladyavatar
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Post by ladyavatar on Nov 10, 2012 15:02:16 GMT -6
Not sure if I'm doing this right (please slap me if I need to move this to another thread), but I'd really appreciate your advice on which summary sounds better for the "Fire and Ice" story I'm working on.
Original: A Zutara epic that begins with a simple question: What if Zuko joined the team following "The Chase?" It is more than one prince of fire whose redemption saga unfolds across a journey through a desert and into Ba Sing Se, a capture by the Fire Nation and a rescue by an unforeseen ally, a betrayal by family and, to save this love, a sacrifice by the one least expected to give it.
Revision: A Zutara epic that begins with a simple question: What if Zuko joined the team following "The Chase?" As two Fire Nation royals discover, darkness is everywhere and it always wins—unless there is a flame strong enough to light the world. Love is the strongest of fires. Love is enough for a Fire Lord to turn the tides of war. Includes Tokka, Urzai, and a most unusual friendship.
In other words, after reading which summary would you be more likely to click and check out the story (or neither - maybe I just need to keep working on it)? Thank you all in advance! *Hugs*
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chromeknickers
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Post by chromeknickers on Nov 10, 2012 17:07:51 GMT -6
A Zutara epic that begins with a simple question: What if Zuko joined the team following "The Chase?" As two Fire Nation royals discover, darkness is everywhere and it always wins—unless there is a flame strong enough to light the world. Love is the strongest of fires. Love is enough for a Fire Lord to turn the tides of war. Includes Tokka, Urzai, and a most unusual friendship. I would just tweak the revision a bit: You can either leave it at that (I'd omit the other pairings from your summary unless they are very important) or you could end it with: or Those are my two cents, anyway.
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ladyavatar
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Post by ladyavatar on Nov 10, 2012 17:18:04 GMT -6
Excellent suggestions! Hmm . . . in that case, I might omit the pairings and use your suggestion of a question to make it:
A Zutara epic that begins with a simple question: What if Zuko joined the team following "The Chase?" As two Fire Nation royals discover, darkness is everywhere and it always wins—unless there is a flame strong enough to light the world. Love is the strongest of fires, but is love enough for a Fire Lord to turn the tides of war?
I guess the only reason I threw in Tokka and Urzai is because some people go "rah rah rah Tokka is horrible y u include it?! rah rah rah" and I wanted to give them a warning in advance. I mentioned Urzai because there are so few fics that explore that relationship thoroughly and I wondered if it might be a point of interest for readers. The "unusual friendship" can't be elaborated upon yet because it would give away a major twist. But you guys are right - simple is probably best!
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Post by ladyavatar on Nov 10, 2012 17:31:07 GMT -6
*Hug* Sorry you had to push through that Tokka-ness. See, it's out of courtesy to readers such as yourself that I'm debating adding Tokka and Urzai into the summary as warnings.
For now, though, I stand at: A Zutara epic that begins with a simple question: What if Zuko joined the team following "The Chase?" In a world where darkness is everywhere, it always seems to win—unless there is a flame strong enough to light the world. Love is the strongest of fires. Could love be enough for a Fire Lord to turn the tides of war?
And seriously, thank you guys super much for weighing in with advice.
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Post by ladyavatar on Nov 10, 2012 18:09:12 GMT -6
Another excellent point. I think I'm going to take your advice on withholding information - and on having a smoother flow. Hopefully this is good, both intriguing and simple:
A Zutara epic that begins with a simple question: What if Zuko joined the team following "The Chase?" When darkness is everywhere, it always seems to win—unless there is a flame strong enough to light the world. Love is the strongest of fires. Could the most unusual of spirit bonds be enough for a Fire Lord to turn the tides of war?
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Post by emletish on Nov 11, 2012 17:31:47 GMT -6
So err, I just wanted to get a few opinions on secret santazutara. I want to do Zutara but from an unusual characters POV. I got a plot bunny for the fic I am working on for the Zutara secret santa. but the plot bunny is about another character and works well with the prompts. Zutara would still be featured, but it would not be the main story - just consitently in the background. they'll be at the annoying contented couple who like to give out terrible love advice stage.
because this is a zutara-secret santa I just wanted to guage if anyone here would be annoyed by getting a zutara gift fic that was about another character. because then I'll go back to the drawing board.
ooh also, I am still working on the next chapter of stalking for anyone feeling anxious. I know it's been a while.
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chromeknickers
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Post by chromeknickers on Nov 11, 2012 19:18:26 GMT -6
I think as long as Zutara is featured in a romantic or creative way you'll be fine.
I know this is probably not the route your going, but I enjoy reading fics that either are an outside view of a relationship or anything that breaks the fourth wall. I love those fics.
As for my SS fic, my giftee will take it and like it, or else! (I have nothing to back up that threat.)
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Post by harlowrd on Nov 12, 2012 0:52:35 GMT -6
Do you have any idea if the gift recipient likes the character whose POV you're using, or the primary ship you're going for? If they do, I wouldn't see a problem with it. In fact, I'd appreciate a perspective on Zutara that probably wouldn't be possible from their own points of view. ooh also, I am still working on the next chapter of stalking for anyone feeling anxious. I know it's been a while. That would be me! Thanks for the update
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Post by harlowrd on Nov 25, 2012 1:05:29 GMT -6
So I'm writing a one-shot about Azula and her relationship with her brother. I'm almost done except for the last scene, which is what inspired me to write the whole thing in the first place: the Agni Kai from her perspective. However, now that I'm there I don't know where to start to make it good enough (or as close to what I envisioned as possible).
The truth is that the Agni Kai scene is profoundly epic in the show, and I feel just describing it from her perspective (however unhinged it is at this point) would be boring and unnecessary, not to mention unlikely to convey the epicness the way the show does. I'm not sure there's a way to do it without making it boring and/or obnoxious. So I'm at a loss. At this point I'm considering skipping it entirely, but then I'd have to find a way to convey the poignancy of that scene somewhere else, or the entire one-shot will feel weird and incomplete. Any suggestions?
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