LadyAvatar Reviews Your Work

[ladyavatar]

This is either the stupidest idea I have ever come up with or one that will earn much love. Basically, this forum has been such an amazing experience for me (and my very first time on a forum, ever!) that I would like to give something back to my friends here on Painted-Blue. Plus, so many of you have been kind enough to read my Fire and Ice saga and offer thoughts and suggestions that I have come to understand this: As writers, one of the greatest gifts we can give one another is feedback on our work.

And that's exactly what I'm going to offer.

The rules:
1) So that I may get to everyone's piece in a timely manner, I ask that you choose only ONE work for me to review and post it below. For now, I ask that you pick either a one-shot or one chapter from a longer work. DO NOT POST MULTIPLE REQUESTS!
2) If your story is on FFN, I will review directly on the site. If your story is elsewhere (deviantART, Avatar Wiki, etc.), I will edit this post to include my review behind a "spoiler!" box so it's still publicly available.
3) Since this is a Zutara forum, please send me Zutara stories to review. Exceptions to this rule are Ozai-centric and Tahnorra stories.

Note: If this becomes popular and not too crazy, I will later open the floor to (a) stories focused on any single character rather than shipping and (b) other shippings from both ATLA and LoK.

Now, as Anton Ego might say, hit me with your best shot.

[azuremoon]

Review my Zutara Month stuff? XD You did 1,2, and 3. XD <3 I'm almost done with Prejudice!!

Loves you darling!!!


www.fanfiction.net/s/8754657/4/Destinies-Intertwined

[ladyavatar]

Done deal. Off to do so now.

[azuremoon]

YAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAY!! I LOVE YOU!!!

[magicalbender]

May you see my Zutara Month prompts? Only one? Ok, um, I actually was proud of my Desired prompt, so please give me feedback on that. These are my first works so I really would appreciate all the critique you could give. Thanks!

www.fanfiction.net/s/8763240/1/Zutara-Month-Goodness

[ladyavatar]

Sure, glad to do so!

Review posted, and that ending was definitely unexpected (in a good way!). On a strictly grammatical note, in the future, you may want to change "her" to "herself" when the object of a sentence is the same as the subject (such as in the case of "she wrapped her arms around her," in which case the second "her" can be "herself" to incorporate the use of reflexive pronouns).

But you did indeed do a wonderful job with the "Desired" prompt, as my review reflects.

[magicalbender]

Yes, I saw it. Thank you.

I had quite a chagrin-worthy and lengthy response so I'm sure you'll see that later.



Thanks for the grammar suggestion. I could use some (a lot) of that haha

[ladyavatar]

Hmm . . . actually, since I have a bit of spare time, I think I'll go through and check out some more of your prompts. Which do you recommend I read next? Rather, which ones are your personal favorites?

[magicalbender]

Well, honestly, I was only proud of Desire. Based on the reviews I've gotten; Potential and Luminous were popular (well popular for me).

[ladyavatar]

Potential and Luminous it will be! ^___^

Edit: Reviews posted. Luminous was sweet, but Potential - awwwwwwwww!!! It was so adorable! XD