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Post by azuremoon on Dec 12, 2012 18:26:01 GMT -6
LMFAO!! no no. I'll leave that kind of exploring to Ursa (or you =P). XDDD
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Post by ladyavatar on Dec 12, 2012 18:43:31 GMT -6
AHAHAHAHA. XD Stop or you'll make me write Urzai smut - I can't keep getting distracted by all these side projects!
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Post by azuremoon on Dec 12, 2012 18:45:23 GMT -6
BUt but but...,.<<
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Post by ladyavatar on Dec 12, 2012 18:52:58 GMT -6
^But, but, but - what? You don't want me distracted by side projects or you want some Urzai smut?
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Post by azuremoon on Dec 12, 2012 18:54:26 GMT -6
Maybe the thought pleases me of the Urzainess. << >>
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Post by shoeninja on Dec 13, 2012 17:44:12 GMT -6
So I am actually following through on my personal challenge to write that little alternate ending I mentioned. It's slow going--I am not a natural when it comes to writing, though I do enjoy it. Just takes me forever. Anyway, I decided to change it up a bit with the POV for part of the alternate epilogue. I kind of like the way it's turning out. Here's a snippet under the spoiler cut... It was cold. The snow had slowed, but the chill in the air left no doubts that the high banks of white powder through which we trudged would be amassing for quite some time. High Winter clouds streaked across the brilliant blue sky, their feathery tendrils obscured by the soaring stones of the dozens of tall buildings that made up Republic City's growing skyline. I pulled my thin coat tightly around myself, bracing against the frigid gusts that swirled snowflakes all around my ankles and into the tops of my boots; my teeth chattering inside my skull. Clasping my ungloved hands before my chapped lips, I blew against my pale fingers and hoped that my breath would combat the numbness that had set in. This time of year always made me wish I had been born in the Fire Nation.
“Quit dawdling.” He called back over his shoulder, the condensation of his hot breath ghosting into the air as wisps of fog. His hands were in his pockets, but he wore no coat and yet seemed hardly to notice that it was cold enough to freeze piss before it could hit the ground. It was a firebender thing, no doubt; though such techniques were still far beyond my own modest abilities. My mother had been a patient teacher, but she wasn't around anymore and trying to learn anything from him was about as painful as pulling teeth. Not that he didn't try—in fact, when my abilities had first manifested he had taken a special interest in my training—but it soon became apparent that I would be a “late bloomer” (as mother had so gently put it), and our sessions always ended in mutual frustration. He was never cruel to me, but I think perhaps whoever trained him as a boy never showed him much leniency.
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Post by ladyavatar on Dec 13, 2012 21:01:00 GMT -6
I love your descriptive writing; fragments like "teeth chattering inside my skull" and "blew against my pale fingers" really helps establish a beautiful scene. I'm guessing the male in his scene is Ozai, but . . . who is the woman?! D: I guess I'll have to read to find out! XD
Thank you for sharing this snippet!
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Post by azuremoon on Dec 13, 2012 21:16:42 GMT -6
Neat! You've got a real talent shoe! I really liked this ending!
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Post by shoeninja on Dec 13, 2012 21:57:00 GMT -6
Thanks you two! It's coming along. I actually had to go back and write revised "events" for the last couple of chapters before the alternate epilogue, which was a chore, but now that I'm finally working on this part I'm glad you talked me into doing it. Your encouragement is really motivating! As for the identity of the speaker in the excerpt... All I will say is that it is not an OC. In fact, none of the main characters in this story are...though I do have a habit of taking very minor characters from the series and MAKING them major ones.
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Post by ladyavatar on Dec 13, 2012 22:01:48 GMT -6
All I will say is that it is not an OC. In fact, none of the main characters in this story are...though I do have a habit of taking very minor characters from the series and MAKING them major ones. ^Ahahahaha - oh, I do this too! XD Believe it or not, the central conflict of parts seven and eight of my fic involve Hahn (yep, this guy: avatar.wikia.com/wiki/Hahn). Hmm, now I'm very much intrigued. As soon as finals and these "Twelve Days of Tahnorra" are over, I know what I'm reading!
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